Its good, to be honest the ryhming seems too forced, especially this line "Turn left cause I can't turn right" it just doesn't seem to fit well and seems like it was put in there just for the sake of rhyming. I can't really think of a third verse either to help ya on that, i'll think a bit and post a few ideas later.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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