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Old 08-15-2021, 08:50 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by SnakeSpiritDude View Post
(picture a Midwest emo song)
Free Tea!

Parallel parked in our Seats
My waters getting colder
I couldn't get much lower
What's taking them so long
This tea isn't mine but I'll drink it anyways

Table of one
growing into a tadpole of my former self
Suddenly
Browse the same page 9 times
...

I would change that one line to:
"Partly undone
Growing out of a cocoon of my former self.
Suddenly
I browsed my bio sitting the shelf"
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Actually, I like you a lot, Nea. That's why I treat you like ****. It's the MB way.

"it counts in our hearts" ?ºº?
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