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Old 08-12-2026, 07:55 PM   #4 (permalink)
nethanpaul
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The story has an interesting psychological angle, especially the way Andy’s conscience keeps confronting him after his decisions. The money-versus-friendship conflict gives the character a clear internal struggle, and the nightmare works well as a visual representation of his guilt. I’d focus on developing Andy’s emotions and consequences a little more, rather than the money amounts, to make the story feel more personal and believable.
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