Karice

This is a snippet of a story I wrote where one of the Protagonists, Andy, who is a Celebrity along with his five friends, James, Jimmy, Alex, Billy, and Mike, tried to sell out his Fugitive Friend, Alex for $5,000/$1,000 for them each when when Alex was on the run for punching a Paparazzi person in his face who was harassing him with a camera and Alex broke the camera. Billy let Alex hide in his house and Andy, Mike, Jimmy, and James agreed to keep Alex at Billy's house as a fugitive. As Alex slept, Andy suggested they sell out Alex for $5,000 as Alex's bounty for turning him in was $5,000.

Andy suggested they sell him out for $1,000 a person. James, Jimmy, Billy, and Mike were shocked and disgusted and refused to sell out Alex. Billy even Zelled Andy $5,000 to not sell out Alex. Andy agreed to not sell out Alex.

Andy later won roughly $700 million after taxes in the Powerball and abandoned his friends because he didn't want to share any of the $700 million after taxes. He then returned to the hotel room that his friends shared and stole $1.6 billion from Jimmy, Mike, Billy, and James but didn't steal any money from Alex since Alex was only worth about 10 million and then abandoned his friends again. He went back to his hotel room that Alex, Billy, James, Mike, and Billy didn't know about and fell asleep.


"Andy got up from his nap and got a massage at the spa. The massage was good, but his conscience told him softly,"This massage would be better with Alex, Jimmy, James, Billy and Mike here." Andy tried to ignore his conscience. Andy paid for the massage and left. He went back to the Luxurious Penthouse Suite and saw on Social Media, Alex, Jimmy, Billy, Mike, James, and still protected him when they refused to tell the Fans he was the winner of the 1.5 Billion when they could have easily told the Fans he won the 1.5 billion before taxes.



Andy went to a Hotel Restaurant and ate a steak meal and paid and left.



Andy went to to the movies. At the movies, his conscience told him softly,"You, Alex, Jimmy, James, Billy, and Mike had so much fun at the movies together, remember?" Andy felt guilty knots forming in his stomach. He said aloud,"Leave me alone!"



After the movies, he went back to the Luxurious Penthouse Suite and watched TV and fell asleep. He had a nightmare that a rope made of money wrapped itself around Andy's neck, suffocating him, as he struggled to breathe in a panic and the money rope than hung him in a tree and he died in the nightmare.



Andy got up in a cold sweat, relieved that it was just a nightmare. Andy's conscience was torturing him in his nightmare since he was fighting it in his waking life.



Andy watched more TV and felt REALLY bad about stealing the 1.6 from Jimmy, James, Billy and Mike. He knew he crossed a big line here, fucing over Jimmy, James, Billy, and Mike for 1.6 Billion. He knew if James, Jimmy, Billy, Mike, and Alex were to press charges on him, he'd be facing around 40 years behind bars for Grand Theft and Grand Larceny. Andy was scared. "

Is this a good story? A follower of my story said she felt my story about Andy's personal demons and his guilt over the money problems he caused between his friends felt shockingly good but what do you guys think about my story? Do you guys find it good?