The general feeling of the lyric is good and it gets the point across, although half the lines come across as pretty pointless in conveying that message. For example, the first few lines:
"Toss it back,
As quick as possible,
After all this time,
The taste seems all too familiar"
Are pretty useless, I don't know what they bring to the lyric. The lines which follow are much better.
The lines:
"Showing me,
That even the smallest things
Are sometimes the hardest"
Seem pretty meaningless, so they could be replaced with something that tells more of the story.
And
"They tell me this works,
But I know,"
Is unnecessarily plain, you could maybe find a way to spruce it up?
Generally, its good but has a fair few dull or pointless lines which should be changed. If you ever read this, get working on it!
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Originally Posted by Katyppfan
When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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