But this a a very open metaphore so that shouldn't really be a problem should it? You could add a part where the person is thinking about whether he shall stay (bad choice) or leave (good choice), and have the people who want him to stay, nag on him, with false promises. That would be a sort of metaphore for how the people around him have effect on his decisions. If that is the underlying meaning you had in mind for it yourself.
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