You've got to keep putting lyrics into structures, otherwise we can't guess where a the verses, choruses and mid-sections would be. There are a lot of individual lines which are very good, but because you haven't structured the song for us, we can't see how it pans out as a song. Grouping it into sections helps you and us to figure out choruses and hooks.
And don't start thinking that a continuous stream of lyrics will work very well for a song. I'm yet to hear it!
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Originally Posted by Katyppfan
When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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