Woah, I'd never read that one before Hobo, but it's wicked. I particularly like the ending, because it ties the lyric up very neatly. If you make it into a song, it'd be good to put a nice simple chorus in, to break it up a bit. Other than that.... A+++++, excellent Musicbanterer, would recommend.
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Originally Posted by Katyppfan
When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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