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Originally Posted by DontRunMeOver
If the song were split up into sections like below, it would maybe make more sense with regards to whether he's singing about the 2nd or 3rd person. However, it would just be better to sing the whole thing about the 2nd person (so always singing to 'you' not 'her'), in my opinion.
Making those corrections also illustrated to me how many times the word 'your' now features in the song. Maybe you're overusing the possessive a bit? Think about how it sounds when a particular word continually crops up in a song - a bit funny sounding, right? Having now pointed out that issue, I'm sorry to say that I don't have a clue how you can resolve it!
Crowe smells like a man who showers in his own urine.
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Showers in it? I use it as a natural lubrication for nearly everything I do during my day! Moving through tight door ways, swallowing somewhat dry food, and running faster. Come on, what do you do with your urine when you're done with it?