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Old 07-06-2006, 02:25 AM   #13 (permalink)
DontRunMeOver
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That chorus is nice. The 2nd and 3rd line are absolutely ace, as is the rhyming with 'necklace' and 'wreckless', although maybe you should lose the word 'stupid' (replace it with a different word if you like) because the rest of the lyric isn't about anything stupid, so the is misplaced.

"You and lust has made us reckless"

Or something like that.

Although I felt the need to add the correction, I can't overemphasise how much I liked the phrase

"She's pulling on my heartstrings
I'm pulling on her necklace"

Keeping it physical! Yeah!
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When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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