sleepy jack

I liked the first part, its pretty nothing really wrong with it.

I don't care for the second part, I find excessive repeating of certain parts of lines annoying.

As for the third part, maybe describe the moon with something other then crescent? Theres alot of repeated wording in here.

Fifth part, you used unknown twice, which looks kind of bad.

Sixth part, Maybe use solution instead of answer on one of them, take out the just at the start of the last verse also.

Seventh part, i'd personally say something like words of an angel.

To the girl you want to know seems kind of a weak way to end that part.

This is probaly the best i've read by you, I suggest reading some books and expanding your vocabulary cause their was alot of repetition in the lyrics.

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