Has it got a chorus?
If not I like the idea of this being it...
Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December
And I know we'll make it in the end
I'll try my best and that's all I can give
But it's hard when your heads like a sieve...
It's hard when your heads like a sieve...
And having read it again several times, I have to say the first verse is brilliant.
Also, I would have picked the line...Pieces Of A Boy, Shadow Of A Man, as the title, despite liking your pick.
It's one of your better ones.
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