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Old 10-11-2006, 02:35 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Burdens fill the gaps
The sun shines through my body
With my back to it
I run from everybody
Pieces of a boy
The shadow of a man
Caught between the two
Lost without a plan

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December

And I know we'll make it in the end

Effort consumes my soul
Realisation is a bother
Facing outward to the world
Not looking at the problem
I'll stare you in the eye
And nothing will have changed
My face forces a smile
but broken I remain

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December

And I know we'll make it in the end
I'll try my best and that's all I can give
But it's hard when your heads like a sieve...
It's hard when your heads like a sieve...




You might not agree, but I'm going to be ****y and say this is my favourite piece of work I've done in a while. Please comment...
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Old 10-11-2006, 02:36 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Love the title ^
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Old 10-11-2006, 02:51 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I was actually a bit indifferent about it... wondered whether it would sound like I was throwing it in their just to rhyme...what you think of the actual song?
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Old 10-11-2006, 03:04 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Has it got a chorus?
If not I like the idea of this being it...

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December
And I know we'll make it in the end
I'll try my best and that's all I can give
But it's hard when your heads like a sieve...
It's hard when your heads like a sieve...


And having read it again several times, I have to say the first verse is brilliant.
Also, I would have picked the line...Pieces Of A Boy, Shadow Of A Man, as the title, despite liking your pick.

It's one of your better ones.
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Old 10-11-2006, 03:12 PM   #5 (permalink)
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This thread reminds me of sievehead from Saturday Superstore

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Old 10-11-2006, 03:15 PM   #6 (permalink)
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^

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