Something I noticed, its sort of repetitive, you rhyme you with you. Also you could probaly change this "it'll come back to life" to something like come back from the dead, so you don't end up using life three times.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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