This reminds me so much of my first songs...And just like mine, it's shit. First off, the repetition is frickin' appalling. The only okay rhyme is fists/resists. Only because they aren't in AA form. You lack any form of innovation, that could set this apart from crap punk groups like the Casualties and the Sex Pistols. Brush up on literary techniques and such. Don't worry, we all start out like this. Just keep pluggin'.
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Wolverinewolfweiselpigeon said:
What's with people dying? Shit.
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