YES! Until the end verse where you write...
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it does look so darkly beautiful.
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Ohmy, it's so weak compared to the rest of the song! And, I don't know if you've ever looked up at a city sky... but it is far from beautiful (now, when I think city, I think of where I've lived... Atlanta, St. Louis, Chicago) it is full of light... but that may not always necessarily be the case - but you know how they say you can't see the stars in a city because of the ambient light? Well there ya go. Please, please do something with this line, go in a different direction.