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Originally Posted by Kevorkian Logic
There's a certain beat missing throughout the piece. I'll hear the beat for a good number of lines and then it disappears for a couple, then comes back. It gives it a choppy feeling. But there is some powerful imagery throughout it that makes the occasionally forced sounding rhymes tolerable.
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I'm not an advocate of forced rhyming, either. But sometimes I feel like it's a necessary evil. I agree with you about the beat - I feel like if I took a few minutes to tidy up the flow it would be fine... I'll give it a look.