sleepy jack

Its a Brad Paisley song....



Anyway, I understand in rap its normal to say wit instead of with or ya instead of your but when typing it out on the forum just say with and your it makes it look much more intelligent.

I don't care for this, for one the last verse seems like a Brad Paisley knock off and it seems like you've never really had experience with alcoholism its more like you saw a TV show or something and wrote about it. I think taking a much less angsty/angry stance would be much more powerful or maybe a look at a specific situation and then telling about that situation. My personal opinion is personal writing is much better then general writing to apply to everyone because it evokes much more emotion.

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