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TheCaster · 11-30-2007, 07:29 AM

Haha you know you love that terminology. But im having an unusually hard time making it flow... Suggestions on making it better are good too.
The crevices:

Whats going through your head
Your falling in
Just because they jump
doesnt mean you have to follow
Have you been cleansed
or is there dirt underneath your nails

the crevices are closing in
hold them back
or you'll fall in

The pigs are off the cliff
leaving you alone
to decide for yourself
Will you jump or follow me?
the red ant in the millions of black
will you stand out? or blend in

the crevices are closing in
hold them back
or you'll fall in

NEW ENDING:
When the time comes
and they all decide to fold
Its your decision to make
Time is running short
Find the light

the crevices have closed
its too late
you've fallen in

11-30-2007, 07:29 AM	#1 (permalink)
TheCaster Music Rapist Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Somewhere in the U.S Posts: 400	Help with flowingness.... Haha you know you love that terminology. But im having an unusually hard time making it flow... Suggestions on making it better are good too. The crevices: Whats going through your head Your falling in Just because they jump doesnt mean you have to follow Have you been cleansed or is there dirt underneath your nails the crevices are closing in hold them back or you'll fall in The pigs are off the cliff leaving you alone to decide for yourself Will you jump or follow me? the red ant in the millions of black will you stand out? or blend in the crevices are closing in hold them back or you'll fall in NEW ENDING: When the time comes and they all decide to fold Its your decision to make Time is running short Find the light the crevices have closed its too late you've fallen in __________________ A soul in tension thats learning to fly Condition grounded but determined to try Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit Last edited by TheCaster; 11-30-2007 at 12:06 PM.