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Old 12-01-2007, 07:00 PM   #2 (permalink)
TheCaster
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1st stanza, its kinda just one big long sentence, try to break it up a bit

2nd stanza, beautiful! great emotion there

3rd and 4th stanza, this is great it has a depth too it that makes it insane.

Beautiful work
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A soul in tension thats learning to fly
Condition grounded but determined to try
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
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