I like the lyrics better, they're pretty sweet man. uhm
things to change:
life turn right- sounds kind of odd
everyone is mean- sounds like a school girl whining
reach your heart- i suggest changing that to like touch your heart or steal your heart
last two stanzas are my favorite, great job!
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A soul in tension thats learning to fly
Condition grounded but determined to try
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
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