You force your lifestyle in me, but there is no chance in success
this dimming light in my life has caused something to happen,
i cant conrtol where i go,
or what i tend to see.
why would you want to control it?
why would you need to approve of what i do or where i go?
(change what i tend to see and keep your tenses the same)
giving me a call on something so futile,
is like little kids trying to tell you something,
that really isn't as important.
(beatiful stuff right here)
its my life that you seem to be controlling for me,
and its not working for me.
you make me feel pain and misery,
even when i dont need it.
(change not working for me, you sound like a pissy girlfriend, when i dont need it doesnt seem to fit too well with pain and misery, make it more sad)
you get me at my worst times,
especially when im in a state,
where i become an easy target.
( going into detail about the state might end up nice, not really neaded tho)
so one question.
is it fun for you?
(perfect way to wrap it up)
__________________
A soul in tension thats learning to fly
Condition grounded but determined to try
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
|