hmm, ok because i definitely am getting a suicidal impression with lines like
"tie me to the lashing post, and cover up my mouth
you can lay me in the water, you can let my corpse drift south"
"it's the last thing that i'll ever do.
all of us will die someday; i am dying soon."
"if you shoot the albatross, i will wear your noose."
"and they say
oh, i want to keep on breathing
oh, troubled times are short and passing
oh, I say
I think i've been here long enough."
but i can also see where you're coming from about never telling people what you think of them when you have
"man, open your mouth, you have to feel something inside.
i toss at night hoping the gods wont let you die
I'll be a beggar if youll just wear my shoes"
like i said, your writing is good. i like a lot of the ideas you have.
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