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Old 12-30-2007, 01:53 AM   #1 (permalink)
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yeah..guess where i got my s/n from. haha



strap me to the anchor, and throw it in the sea

to my sons and daughters, raise them well for me

tie me to the lashing post, and cover up my mouth

you can lay me in the water, you can let my corpse drift south



if it's the last thing that I ever do

I will come back and talk to you, I will have made room

it's the last thing that i'll ever do.

all of us will die someday; i am dying soon.





man, open your mouth, you have to feel something inside.

i toss at night hoping the gods wont let you die

I'll be a beggar if youll just wear my shoes

if you shoot the albatross, i will wear your noose.





and they say

oh, i want to keep on breathing

oh, troubled times are short and passing

oh, I say

I think i've been here long enough.






water in your grave, sinking in the mud underneath

and who can be saved?

keep your enemies close, but dont let your friends get away.
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Old 12-31-2007, 12:24 AM   #2 (permalink)
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cheer up?

the writing is good in itself, but songs of suicide never really sit right with me. however, i do love nirvana...so uhh

i dont know lol. sorry to not say much.
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Old 01-01-2008, 08:38 PM   #3 (permalink)
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it's not about suicide at all. idk. it's about never telling people what you think of them.
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Old 01-01-2008, 09:46 PM   #4 (permalink)
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hmm, ok because i definitely am getting a suicidal impression with lines like

"tie me to the lashing post, and cover up my mouth
you can lay me in the water, you can let my corpse drift south"

"it's the last thing that i'll ever do.
all of us will die someday; i am dying soon."

"if you shoot the albatross, i will wear your noose."

"and they say
oh, i want to keep on breathing
oh, troubled times are short and passing
oh, I say
I think i've been here long enough."

but i can also see where you're coming from about never telling people what you think of them when you have

"man, open your mouth, you have to feel something inside.

i toss at night hoping the gods wont let you die

I'll be a beggar if youll just wear my shoes"

like i said, your writing is good. i like a lot of the ideas you have.
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Old 01-01-2008, 10:31 PM   #5 (permalink)
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heres the breakdown: this song is basically about the lack of emotional communication between my father and i. i basically couldnt sleep one night because although i do love him, i have never indicated this to my father even once, nor has he ever told me the same.

lines 1-4 are metaphors about both the pain felt when i think of his dying without knowing how i feel.

lines 5-8 are about the urgency of the situation because of the untimely and unpredictable nature of death.

lines 9-12 are self explanatory.

lines 13-16 are about how i'd rather pretend like one of us will die tomorrow and say what i need to say than hold it in like ive got forever.

the last lines are just a reference to how much i would loathe not having th chance any longer.


there you go.


not suicide.

ha.
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Old 01-02-2008, 11:27 AM   #6 (permalink)
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well... even if its not suicidal... it deffinately has a suicidal vibe about it due to his qoutes
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Old 01-05-2008, 10:25 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I'm going to analyze your "song" since you were kind enough to analyze all my lyrics in one sentence, here I go. I'm ready to be blown away!

strap me to the anchor, and throw it in the sea
Oh gotta love that angst and you got your own screenname for something you wrote? How pretentious!
to my sons and daughters, raise them well for me
Let's hope your children don't have your obvious mental impairment or it'll be a bitch to raise them well!
tie me to the lashing post, and cover up my mouth
I thought you wanted us to strap you to an anchor now you want to us to tie you to a lashing post?
you can lay me in the water, you can let my corpse drift south
Wouldn't it be better to tie you to a raft or something? Lashing posts are typically things we use on land, to you know, lash people. I also don't understand why you switch from drowning with an anchor to floating south on a lashing post. Stay consistent with your angst!

if it's the last thing that I ever do
I will come back and talk to you, I will have made room
it's the last thing that i'll ever do.

Ohh dramatic.
all of us will die someday; i am dying soon.
Really Shakespeare? ALL of us will die? I NEVER KNEW!

man, open your mouth, you have to feel something inside.
There are so many oral sex jokes I could make here but I can't decide on which one.
i toss at night hoping the gods wont let you die
See: ohh dramatic!
I'll be a beggar if youll just wear my shoes
I don't really see the common theme with begging and shoes but you've proven already that you're good at trying to connect unconnected things.
if you shoot the albatross, i will wear your noose.
What does shooting a harmless bird have to do with wearing a noose?

and they say
oh, i want to keep on breathing
oh, troubled times are short and passing
oh, I say
I think i've been here long enough.

You're such a melodramatic little kid, I love it.

water in your grave, sinking in the mud underneath
This could have been avoided if you'd just be buried in a coffin like every other self-pitying angsty teenager.
and who can be saved?
Obviously not you or your songwriting ability.
keep your enemies close, but dont let your friends get away.
That isn't one of the most cliched images I've ever heard at all.

Summary: So are you writing these songs hoping Hawthorne Heights will come along and see you bending down with your lyrical ass in the air and fuck you up the ass?
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Old 01-05-2008, 10:38 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Somebody pissed crowq off!
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Old 01-05-2008, 10:52 PM   #9 (permalink)
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When I think of someone singing this song I picture a pirate

Are you a pirate?

another one for me
we're the filthy vermin
that will set you people free
we're the filthy vermin
that will set you people free



the night was dark


the seas were rough
the port lay straight ahead
the booze ran out
the men grew tired
and this is what they said:



”strap me to the anchor


throw it in the sea

to my sons and daughters,


raise them well for meeee

well the jolly roger pulled through
and made it to the land
we disembarked
went into town with vengence in our hand
the children cried
the woman sighed
the men just turn their heads
so with a smile we chated loud and this is what we said


”tie me to the lashing post,

cover up mee mouth

you can lay mee in the water,

let me corpse drift south





*I may have ripped off the mad caddies only a teeny tiny bit
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Old 01-06-2008, 02:46 AM   #10 (permalink)
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in short, its a dumb, unoriginal, angsty mediocre poem
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