(Work In Progress) but anyone want to review??
hey, im new to songwriting, only been writing songs for a year or two, and plus ive been in writers block for a while. BUT, i just recently wrote soemthin, nd i need your guys's help wit reviewing it. do you think you can help? thanks for all who do =)
Stillness Of the Night
Laying here all alone
This room is as still as stone
I just wish you were with me
Everything moves so silently
I only want your company
But at least I know youre in my dreams
Touching your necklace for comfort
talking quiet as if you were
On my bed invisibly listening
Oh how I want to see your eyes
As I think of our most recent goodbye
I miss you so longingly
And as I go to sleep
You are all I see
I then sart to remember
How my life got better, by the joy you bring
In the stillness of the night
I think peacefully
of how you affect my life
No more getting lost again
My days of wandering have come to an end
As the lightning strikes
I wish I could hold you
and keep you safe witin my sight
One day ill show you what youve done for me is right
As i think in the stillness of the night
Well thats it so far, any suggestions on how to make it better?
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