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Old 01-11-2008, 02:57 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by PaperHurricanesAndPlanes View Post
^ That'd be good if the poem was about temptation, though if it is it should be clearer.
I think this poem can be interpreted differently. You're right it can be about temptation. It could also be about striving for something that you know you might never acheive. You're doing something that shouldn't be done. The wind blows across the ocean, but ends up echoing on the beach. The waves travel toward land, but when they get there, the ocean pulls them back. The sand travels up to the water's edge, but gives in to the sea. They'd all like to go on forever, but it wasn't meant to happen like that. But that doesn't mean they aren't going to try. The wind's always gonna blow, the waves are always rolling in, etc.

I think as long as you think about it, it's pretty clear. But that might just be because I wrote it. It might not be so clear to someone who's just reading it. So if you have any ideas or suggestions on making it clearer or improving it in any way, I'm welcome to them.
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