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Old 02-17-2008, 11:04 PM   #3 (permalink)
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The rhyme was annoyingly bland, and all in all the the poem wasn't excellent contest-wise, though it had a few gems.

The first verse, with the exception of the repetition in the last two lines, is quite nice. The second verse was good. Also, the first half of the third verse (after the first singing of what I think is a chorus) is good.
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