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Old 04-07-2008, 01:59 PM   #4 (permalink)
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i'm hoping the upload date of april 1st is indicative of this song's true intentions. otherwise what's the real point? to prove you're over her by singing about her for 4 minutes longer than necessary?

you should also get someone to proofread your lyrics.

i took for granted that you be around - you should be you'd
i thought your feet was planted on the ground - feet is plural, was is singular, should be were
everybody has their mistakes that they make - so she was predestined to sleep around? the mistake already existed it only had to play itself out?
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