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clockworkmice · 12-26-2008, 01:10 PM

These are some lyrics I wrote after being inspired by knockin' on heaven's door.

Can’t seem to stay I’ve got to go,
My shirt is stained, torn all up there
I tried to go against the flow,
It was a chance I thought I’d dare.

I feel cold I’ve got to go,
Got to step on that shining stair,
There’s no more pain I’ll ever know.
Though it may seem like it’s unfair.

Got to go I can’t stay here,
I’ll be happy don’t you fear,
Leave me here in the dirt,
After this I can’t get hurt,

[instrumental]

Oooooo, I’ve got to go [fade out]

Do you think I need to expand it? I'm also wondering if the lack of chorus is any problem....

I'd appreciate any replies you have.

12-26-2008, 01:10 PM	#1 (permalink)
clockworkmice Groupie Join Date: Sep 2008 Posts: 27	I've got to leave These are some lyrics I wrote after being inspired by knockin' on heaven's door. Can’t seem to stay I’ve got to go, My shirt is stained, torn all up there I tried to go against the flow, It was a chance I thought I’d dare. I feel cold I’ve got to go, Got to step on that shining stair, There’s no more pain I’ll ever know. Though it may seem like it’s unfair. Got to go I can’t stay here, I’ll be happy don’t you fear, Leave me here in the dirt, After this I can’t get hurt, [instrumental] Oooooo, I’ve got to go [fade out] Do you think I need to expand it? I'm also wondering if the lack of chorus is any problem.... I'd appreciate any replies you have. Last edited by clockworkmice; 12-26-2008 at 03:01 PM.