Originally Posted by Shoe

Well Lutherfish you seem to actually care about writing... this is kinda what my stuff looked like at first. But really its a little generic and some of the lines were just a little cheesy and whiny

"And even now I couldn’t stop King Kong"

"his was the necessary route
I’m ****ing steaming and pouting
And ****ing screaming and shouting
I need all these feelings out"


But keep writing man it takes practice. Be more abstract maybe? Give some originality.