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Old 02-21-2009, 11:51 AM   #10 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset
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when you rhyme, get a good rhyme scheme or dont bother at all. as you want to rap this, its good that you ended the lines of your stanzas wierdly so that people know its all one long run-one sentence. on the other hand, Double X is right, shorten your stanzas so its easier to read
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