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ArchAngel1024 · 02-24-2009, 04:35 PM

I wouldn't worry about the length, since depending on how you write the vocal piece, the lyrics can be extended to fit nicely, regardless of the actual length of the track in text form.

I think it's an interesting piece, and I'm not sure if there's a rhythm you have in mind, so I won't judge the flow of it, since I've written parts that flow only in certain phrasings before.

And yeah, that added verse seems out of place (and in my opinion, twilight has made vampire metaphors extremely cliché and annoying).

EDIT: Regarding the ending: If you're stumped for an ending, don't force it. Try using an altered version of the chorus,
"Something different than the chorus but with similar flow and more resolution
cry wolf
same note as above
cry wolf"
I think that would work. *shrug* just throwing suggestions around though.

02-24-2009, 04:35 PM	#8 (permalink)
ArchAngel1024 Groupie Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 10	I wouldn't worry about the length, since depending on how you write the vocal piece, the lyrics can be extended to fit nicely, regardless of the actual length of the track in text form. I think it's an interesting piece, and I'm not sure if there's a rhythm you have in mind, so I won't judge the flow of it, since I've written parts that flow only in certain phrasings before. And yeah, that added verse seems out of place (and in my opinion, twilight has made vampire metaphors extremely cliché and annoying). EDIT: Regarding the ending: If you're stumped for an ending, don't force it. Try using an altered version of the chorus, "Something different than the chorus but with similar flow and more resolution cry wolf same note as above cry wolf" I think that would work. shrug just throwing suggestions around though.