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Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset
i like the getting closer to death bit. however, i dont think your repetition does much to help the poem as it doesnt influence any certain idea over and over; it seems like it exists only to lull the poem into a rhythmical pattern and help with the flow. the flow is good, mind you, but try to keep it from becoming too tedious.
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I get what your saying.
Im not the most expieranced writer, Im just sharing what I have for help on improving.
thank you for the tips