Does this sound okay?
I put some random words on a page and this is what came out:
A shadow of my former self
Depressed, afraid, not good in health
A cancerous piece of skin
A reminder of my sin
Afraid, confused, don't know what to do
I wonder how i'm still living after all I have been through
And I still wonder why
This part of me had to die
I was so blind and now I see
You as a part of me that shouldn't be
I'm sorry if i've shown you hostility
I just wish to break free
Free from the time that went too fast
From the thoughts that resurface of the past
Leaving you left me broken scarred
Leaving my heart callous and hard
That's about it. I asked my friend if it sounded okay and he only liked the lines:
I wonder how i'm still living after all I have been through
And I still wonder why
This part of me had to die
I don't think it sounds quite right. It sounds so much like some rap lyrics and nothing a death metal band would be screaming.
What do you think?
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