I feel obligated to give critique back so...
I think that many of these songs come off as too informal. I know that will sound weird but I don't feel like I am reading the lyrics to a song. Also, for your last one, rhyming in the excess can get very dreary. I think you are walking on a slippery slope when you talk to directly to someone, can come off as amazing or not.
Quote:
In fact, his definition of
wrong could be wrong simply
by virtue of the fact thereof
that defining morals isn’t free
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You also seem to write your songs as sentences and then tweak them. I can't tell if they come out good, but I think it is very hard to make it flow and fit it into the music.
cheers