Music Banter - View Single Post - Im 15 and this is my unfinished first song entitled "Was It True".

Con317 · 07-07-2009, 11:42 PM

This song has no melody so far. I understand it rhymes throughout the song. That is just my style of writing and i will expand on my writing when i feel comfortable. I am open to suggestions and critisim. Rate song from 1-10 thank you!

Was it True (Working Title)

[Verse 1]
Do you remember long ago?
When our love was strong and it began to grow
But now its gone and i need to know

[Chorus]
When you said "i love you"
Was it true?
Now your gone and im so very blue
Oh, so blue...

[Verse 2]
Do you remember when our future was so bright?
Now when you see me, you cant even stand my sight
I can't fix whats happened but i've come to (either "make it right" or "end the fight")

[Bridge]
Im sorry for all the pain
I still love you but now
i know youll never feel the same
Ive changed my ways and thats a fact
Please oh Please i want you back

[SOLO]

[Verse 3]
Do you remember all of the tears?
I wish i couldve found a way to fight away your fears
But now your gone and i need to show

[Chorus]
When i said "i love you"
It was true
But now i've changed and it was all for you
All for you
It is true....

[END]

07-07-2009, 11:42 PM	#1 (permalink)
Con317 Groupie Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 4	Im 15 and this is my unfinished first song entitled "Was It True". This song has no melody so far. I understand it rhymes throughout the song. That is just my style of writing and i will expand on my writing when i feel comfortable. I am open to suggestions and critisim. Rate song from 1-10 thank you! Was it True (Working Title) [Verse 1] Do you remember long ago? When our love was strong and it began to grow But now its gone and i need to know [Chorus] When you said "i love you" Was it true? Now your gone and im so very blue Oh, so blue... [Verse 2] Do you remember when our future was so bright? Now when you see me, you cant even stand my sight I can't fix whats happened but i've come to (either "make it right" or "end the fight") [Bridge] Im sorry for all the pain I still love you but now i know youll never feel the same Ive changed my ways and thats a fact Please oh Please i want you back [SOLO] [Verse 3] Do you remember all of the tears? I wish i couldve found a way to fight away your fears But now your gone and i need to show [Chorus] When i said "i love you" It was true But now i've changed and it was all for you All for you It is true.... [END]