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Lain_Lain · 07-09-2009, 01:51 PM

i like the lyrics but when i sang them I lost the rhythm when i got to the second verse. you should count the syllables in the first verse and match them with the second verse.
"nothing's so loud" and "nothing's so cold" fit very nicely but "as hearing when we lie" have less syllables than "as closing the heart when all we need."

so if you just work on that the song would have perfect rhythm. =]

07-09-2009, 01:51 PM	#2 (permalink)
Lain_Lain Groupie Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Earth Posts: 25	i like the lyrics but when i sang them I lost the rhythm when i got to the second verse. you should count the syllables in the first verse and match them with the second verse. "nothing's so loud" and "nothing's so cold" fit very nicely but "as hearing when we lie" have less syllables than "as closing the heart when all we need." so if you just work on that the song would have perfect rhythm. =] __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]LainLain