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Old 07-08-2009, 08:48 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default All I Want - Lyrics written by me

nothing's so loud
as hearing when we lie
the truth is not kind
and you've said neither am i
but the air outside so soft is saying everything

all i want is to feel this way
to be this close, to feel the same
all i want is to feel this way
the evening speaks, i feel it say...

nothing's so cold
as closing the heart when all we need
is to free the soul
but we wouldn't be that brave i know
and the air outside so soft, confessing everything

and it won't matter now
whatever happens to me
though the air speaks of all we'll never be
it won't trouble me

and it feels so close
let it take me in
let it hold me so
i can feel it say...
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Old 07-09-2009, 01:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i like the lyrics but when i sang them I lost the rhythm when i got to the second verse. you should count the syllables in the first verse and match them with the second verse.
"nothing's so loud" and "nothing's so cold" fit very nicely but "as hearing when we lie" have less syllables than "as closing the heart when all we need."

so if you just work on that the song would have perfect rhythm. =]
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