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Originally Posted by Terrible Lizard
The amount of thought put into this is evident, but it seems a bit "crammed."
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I agree.
I really dig these lines:
"those wedding bells are ringing,
but they sound like gunshot salutes."
Matrimony and wedlock, arrested and developed -
the key to your heart is an autopsy,
This stanza I'm not too fond of, it seems like your'e trying to make every single line profound. Agnosticism or any ism's just don't have any emotional impact and they make it seem like your writing an essay on a song rather than writing a song:
After the afterglow of the alphabet dissipates,
agnosticism and you can unite in dystopia,
but where is that, one might ask?
drowning in the Atlantic, with the angels.
They're good lyrics in need of some major skimmin'.I get the impression this is about a really crappy marriage, or fate in general.