I'd agree with Nick. We know where the "story" takes place, and how the people there feel, but not a whole lot else. The extra dimension you could give it by editing in a bit more could mean the difference between a somewhat average angsty poem, and a piece of art that demands to be read and felt.
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"Not remotely! Because iocaine comes from Australia, as everyone knows. And Australia is entirely peopled with criminals. And criminals are used to having people not trust them as you are not trusted by me, so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of you."
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