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Old 08-18-2009, 10:31 PM   #1 (permalink)
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I've been writing for a little while now and here is one of my newest ones. Please read, comment and critique. any feed back would be appreciated, Enjoy:

The Upright, Lose The Edge

Lets lose the edge
and cuddle close together
lose ourselves in melodies
you're the reason I wrote
no reason there's no forever
I promise to hit the note
that'll prove my soul
through such poetic grammer

Chorus:

Gimme a piano
hammers and strings
I'll share myself
The keys to you're heart
are black and white
I'll make you melt
and fall apart
with a lullaby from me to you

Put down the guitar
take up the upright
lit in moonlight
look to the stars
sing from the inside
soft and slow
its no sign of weakness
just tenderness
love is in the music
music tells of love
love here, coming and gone
and love you don't know

Chorus

Caress the keys
touch your heart
this music is art
that speaks out
you're what its all about
gimme a piano
hammers and strings
I'll make you melt
with a lullaby just to you

a lullaby for lack of sleep
the music dives deep
a lullaby just for you
the music to help you through
a lullaby when I can't be there
the music, it'll keep you here
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