much much better. It's understandable and the topic is actually rather interesting. It seems a bit more reflective than most rap. If you wrote it directly to a specific song, than flow isn't too big of a question. Just keep writing and placing your songs (in this thread) and we'll tell you when there's a problem.
peace,
-nick
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