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Originally Posted by AwwSugar
Dearest Erica,
As difficult of a time I have with rhyming, I quite loved this poem.
I have one thing that I would personally fix, and I'm wondering if you like my idea as well. Instead of this:
I would keep the rhythm, like this.
I'm not going to lie to you and say I read through the entire thing. I read about half. But I promise I will read the poem through. I might actually want to print it out, I quite like it.
I'm sorry it's taken me so long to come back and read this for you. Of all of your poetry that I have read, this is the one I can relate to the most.
I love you to death, and I'm heartbroken that you were thinking of me while I was being so careless.
Much Love (in a hearfelt letter-like post),
Sugar
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My Dear Sugar,
Thank you for visiting my thread again and for your suggestion about the rhythm of "Garden." I appreciate you reading (half) and thinking of something you'd recommend altering...but I hope you know I like you just as much even if you don't visit the thread! Don't worry--I haven't been feeling too, too, too, too, too, too, *too* terribly neglected. Still, it is nice to hear your feedback, much as I have now come to rely on The Unfan to ground me in reality. He is a good, harsh critic...almost as good as you!
And so I close,
as always,
with my brainfelt =@ affection,
--VeggiePants (aka Erica)