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Originally Posted by Scissorman
So, here's another one 
Voices
I told the voices to get out of my head
But they stayed
I told the secrets to get out of my life
They remained
If I keep waiting then for sure I know
Madness will come
If I keep running I know I will
Lose my way home
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Hi Scissorman,
I especially liked this faster-paced, shorter song, "Voices." I felt it did a good job showing the racing thoughts of someone hearing voices while going crazy. I liked the overall feeling of the song with its eerie, creepy quality.
I enjoyed the interesting synthesizer sounds (the "bloop, bloop, bloop" sounds...not sure how to describe them!), the beat, and the layering of the singer's faster, lower voice and higher angelic one. I recommend reducing the volume of the higher vocals slightly so that it is easier to understand the lower vocals.
While looking at your lyrics, I had wondered how the near rhymes would sound. I see you use a lot of internal vowel rhymes within words (such as "st
ayed" and "rem
ained") and visual rhymes (such as "come" and "home"). I felt these help give cohesion to your lyrics. Also, I feel you changed the lyrics enough during the repetitions to avoid them feeling repetitive.