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Old 02-19-2010, 09:01 PM   #1 (permalink)
TheLonelyKid
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Default Crappy Song I Wrote

Umm hi.
I got bored today and I decided to write a (very bad) song. This is my first attempt at song-writing, a concept that struck me as interesting. I'm open to any criticism, be brutal with me if you want, as you can see I don't think much of it :P.

(Intro)
Ohhh, oh oh oh,
Ohhh, oh oh oh,

(Verse 1)
You can't imagine what I'm going through,
All the things that happen when I think of you,
You make me lose my mind,
How did I make such a find?
I gotta escape this place,
All of these haunting memories, I gotta erase.

(Bridge)
When you kiss me (baby),
When you touch me (baby),
When you love me (baby),
Please dont leave me (baby).

(Chorus)
I'm in love with your touch,
Everything about you, I like it so much,
I look into your eyes,
And I'm dragged deeper into my demise.

(Verse 2)
I can't help going back to you,
Everything always feels new.
You make me feel so good,
Doing things I never knew I could.
How do you do it baby?
Working some kind of magic maybe?

(Bridge)
When you kiss me (baby),
When you touch me (baby),
When you love me (baby),
Please don't leave me (Baby).

(Chorus)
I'm in love with your touch,
Everything about you, I like it so much,
I look into your eyes,
And I'm dragged deeper into my demise.

(Repeat Chorus, Fading Out)

I know it's pretty cheesy, but I'm not that imaginative. If you've made it this far without dying, thanks for wasting your time on me .
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