It is decently written for the concept you've chosen, but the concept you've chosen is used to death. This sort of pop "I need you" stuff is very easy to write but is still a respectable choice for your first song, which you've succeeded in doing fairly well (atleast you didn't jump into a topic like drugs or alchohol like a lot of first timers). I say keep writing, I see potential there - 'specially since you've got a good sense of meter.
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