LuneLight,
Your poems feel very personal and honest to me as you touch wistfully on relationships that never existed quite like you wish, and on the joy and pain you experience. I like especially those moments when the possibilities you dream about and the realities you face struggle with each other and you wonder which will win and whether hope is reasonable.
Pessimism and optimism seem to be pressing against each other in your poetry, both trying to fill the space but neither able to do so fully and permanently. I feel your poems are particularly memorable when they focus on that conflict.
Here are some of my favorite moments in your poems:
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Now and again i'll remember you and my tongue tingles with
the familiar taste of bliss
But it's swallowed by the hunger of the empty sky
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Cover my eyes... Wake up in a universe where having a heart has no penalty
By now I know like every promise, every dream is only temporary
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I get home and curse my reflection
All I see are my imperfections
And I stand in that lonely place
Tears race down my fake face
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Fragile angel... You were so afraid to spread your wings
Look at you now
For all we know, paradise may be a lie
All we know is what we've been told and with little question we keep our faith in the word
I don't know much about heaven and if it really exists anywhere
But I have spent countless nights wishing I was there
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As an aside, I'm very curious about what it is like to live in South Africa!