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Old 12-14-2010, 05:29 PM   #21 (permalink)
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Default Fragile angel

Fragile angel, I hope you find your peace
You were so afraid to spread your wings
Look at you now
you're soaring through the skies with all your beauty to a place far from here
A place you've been dreaming of
A place without burden

I hear the sun shines much brighter there
And won't hurt your eyes
It only warms and frees your soul

Tell me...
Is it true?
Is there love for everyone?
Have you been relieved of those burdens you carried for so long?
Is it all better now?
Are you finally at peace?
As you rise from the twilight, don't look back
Embrace your happiness and I'll be okay
I'll get there someday

For all we know, paradise may be a lie
All we know is what we've been told and with little question we keep our faith in the word
I don't know much about heaven and if it really exists anywhere
But I have spent countless nights wishing I was there
So I choose to believe it's more real than anything we can touch
So fragile angel, I think you'll be okay...

Have you seen the ones we loved so many years ago?
I can only imagine how magical it feels to be in the presence of the ones we've lost again
Maybe one day when I find my way home like you, I won't need to imagine
So no matter how old I may grow and how long it takes me
Promise you'll remember my face
I'll remember yours... And I hope you'll be waiting for me once I enter those pearly gates

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Old 12-14-2010, 11:59 PM   #22 (permalink)
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LuneLight,

Your poems feel very personal and honest to me as you touch wistfully on relationships that never existed quite like you wish, and on the joy and pain you experience. I like especially those moments when the possibilities you dream about and the realities you face struggle with each other and you wonder which will win and whether hope is reasonable.

Pessimism and optimism seem to be pressing against each other in your poetry, both trying to fill the space but neither able to do so fully and permanently. I feel your poems are particularly memorable when they focus on that conflict.

Here are some of my favorite moments in your poems:

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Now and again i'll remember you and my tongue tingles with
the familiar taste of bliss
But it's swallowed by the hunger of the empty sky

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Cover my eyes... Wake up in a universe where having a heart has no penalty
By now I know like every promise, every dream is only temporary
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I get home and curse my reflection
All I see are my imperfections
And I stand in that lonely place
Tears race down my fake face
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Fragile angel... You were so afraid to spread your wings
Look at you now

For all we know, paradise may be a lie
All we know is what we've been told and with little question we keep our faith in the word
I don't know much about heaven and if it really exists anywhere
But I have spent countless nights wishing I was there
As an aside, I'm very curious about what it is like to live in South Africa!
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Old 12-15-2010, 01:03 AM   #23 (permalink)
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I'm really glad you like my poetry... Lol and SA, its ok I guess except for the crime. And no we don't hav lions in our back yards lol
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Old 12-19-2010, 08:54 PM   #24 (permalink)
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good stuff
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Old 01-06-2011, 06:40 PM   #25 (permalink)
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Default Hope is Evanescent

You waste another night waiting on a miracle
A miracle that'll change everything
A shooting star that'll finally grant your only wish
Though that day may never come
it helps to be hopeful
But also hurts never knowing if your faith has any worth

With eager eyes waiting to see that dark cloud parting to reveal
something other than the lifeless firmament
There's always nothing... No more reasons to believe that some day there'll be a rainbow to see
I am so tired and my eyes are weak
Maybe this is all there is...

Tonight my emotions surface...
They weigh a lifetime of wrong on my chest
I've lost faith in the power of dreams and
I'm beginning to feel the distance between reality and fantasy
Time to close those books of fiction that convinced me of a better world
And let the past perish in defeat.

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Old 01-17-2011, 05:20 PM   #26 (permalink)
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Default Unworthy soul

There's nothing left to do...
No choices left to make.
Every road thus far,
i've followed to a dead end
Along the way I found and lost what I thought were friends.
This time I choose to wander these woods alone.
The moonless sky will be my only shelter
Voices sing to my soul & call me to a desolate lake
This lake is home to evanescent memories
drifting within so zealously.
The cold promises to numb every thought that torments me
I wouldn't have to fight once I'm sound asleep
When winter turns the ripples above me to ice
So shall it freeze the pain in my eyes
Sinking, I let the dark swallow me.
I'm left with no light...
Only the despondence that echoes in my mind
The time that never passes feeds the feeling of ennui
No salvation... No relief
Like the rest of the forgotten, I found myself unworthy

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Old 01-21-2011, 07:55 PM   #27 (permalink)
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Wow those are great!
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Old 01-25-2011, 02:00 PM   #28 (permalink)
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Default Hide your eyes from me

A thousand butterflies sparkled in your eyes
A different kind of love is born into the sky...
The day turns to night and the music stops...
It goes quiet when you say goodbye...
I open my mouth to let out the lies that would make you stay and bury the hurt
I fall into the earth and lather my skin in dirt
I embrace the purgatory that i'm worth

Fly away, fly away... Leave me down here
Spread your wings and leave me with nobody to talk to
Fly away, fly away... Take the life with you as you go
Leave me alone with nothing to take the place of you...
As I watch you leave, you hide your eyes from me...

Countless days and endless nights i've tried doing what's right
While I face the war in me, I see couples taking flight
They were all strong enough to be lifted and freed
But i'm still waiting for answers down on my knees
The waiting makes me tired... It never comes to an end
Nothing fills me with the same life that I felt when you looked at me

Fly away, fly away... Leave me grounded by nothingness
Fill your lungs with your freedom, i'll fill mine with darkness
Fly away, fly away, take the love as you soar
Paint the skies with your dozen shades of happiness and i'll paint my heart grey...

As I watch you leave... As I watch you ascend...
You embrace your freedom and hide your eyes from me...
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Old 02-08-2011, 12:27 PM   #29 (permalink)
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I really believe that when lyrics or poems come from your heart, nobody can claim it's bad or good.
It is what it is, and nothing more or less.

In my opinion you write quite nicely.

Keep it up!!
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Old 02-12-2011, 04:14 PM   #30 (permalink)
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I agree with you seu... And thanx i'm losing faith in my writing these days
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