Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry
12-10-2007, 10:43 AM
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Not long ago you were a waitress forlorn
Is...
Not long ago you were a waitress forlorn
Is not conversational. Never end a sentence with an adjective, unless it's preceded by a derivative of 'to be' (a waitress who was forlorn).
Try...
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