2 new songs (lyrics, singer, dance, house, rock)

riseagainstrocks · 11-05-2005, 09:38 AM

This Is Giving In
The weight that we carry on our shoulders can be lifted if we just give in.

I’m so far from home, and now I know, that the choices I make, are truly my own

I’ll say the final prayer but it’s already too late
Death rides a pale horse, and of course, Oblivion rides in his wake

What we sought is not what we originally thought

Cleave your way through mere mortal’s in order to obtain the prize, your life, in exchange for a place in memory.

Better to rule in hell than serve in heaven.

And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes

All I remember is how the flames danced in your eyes. You always claimed you were handy with a lighter. What is amazing is that the rotted wood actually caught.

Now I’m on the wrong side of the continental divide.
I’d hide my disgust but to bide time might be careless at this point.

I desire only to see you consumed by the very fire you caused. The very flame you grew and knew would consume you.

This is not revenge. All I did was hand you the match. And maybe some gasoline. And maybe some soaked rags.

adidasss · 11-07-2005, 04:27 PM

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Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

This Is Giving In
The weight that we carry on our shoulders can be lifted if we just give in.

I’m so far from home, and now I know, that the choices I make, are truly my own

I’ll say the final prayer but it’s already too late
Death rides a pale horse, and of course, Oblivion rides in his wake

What we sought is not what we originally thought

Cleave your way through mere mortal’s in order to obtain the prize, your life, in exchange for a place in memory.

Better to rule in hell than serve in heaven.

And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes

All I remember is how the flames danced in your eyes. You always claimed you were handy with a lighter. What is amazing is that the rotted wood actually caught.

Now I’m on the wrong side of the continental divide.
I’d hide my disgust but to bide time might be careless at this point.

I desire only to see you consumed by the very fire you caused. The very flame you grew and knew would consume you.

This is not revenge. All I did was hand you the match. And maybe some gasoline. And maybe some soaked rags.

nice man, really good.....it flows......a bit short no?

riseagainstrocks · 11-07-2005, 09:50 PM

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Originally Posted by spillzgotgame

Yo its the female of the game new sheriff in town
didn't mean to do it it but i stole the crown
Its funny how hot my rhymes is hotta than the devil hisself
Spittin balls of fire but the ice it never melts
Theze dudes dont wanna touch me i send sizzles to they finga tips
makin my qoutes like high notes just like how a singer rips
And theze females... i hate to mention
I reppin for them but to that they pay no attention
Settin examples for the shy one for that was me back in tha day
But i gets no respect for helpin in pavin the way
and theze last twelve bars that i spat in ur direction
best get ya hands up like michael jackson with an erection
Holla
(Ill Spillz) (Major runs this Cit-A)

put your own song in your own thread

and yes adidasss. alittle shorter but i'm liking brevity more and more these days.

Merkaba · 11-09-2005, 05:42 PM

I particularly like the last line of the first song.

Is the last one something that has sort of happened in your life before? Has a mate burnt a house down or anything? It sounds very autobiographical. If that makes any sense.

phoenixflames · 11-09-2005, 08:21 PM

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Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

I’m so far from home, and now I know, that the choices I make, are truly my own.

I especially enjoyed that line. Good phrasing. I'll take a stab that "And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes" is metephorical for a specific event in your life, rather than an actual fire?

jibber · 11-09-2005, 10:11 PM

^ nah think he's just a pyro. there's no deeper meaning to that song at all.

DontRunMeOver · 11-10-2005, 04:03 AM

Nice lyrics Rise Against Rocks. I prefered "And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes" as it had a strong theme.

Were you writing these lyrics as a starting point for the song, or fitting them into an already existing song? To me the phrasing looked more like poetry than lyrics - as you'd typically see a lot of short phrases with obvious repeating rhythms in lyrics rather than a few long ones with no obvious rhythmic pattern or hooklines.

riseagainstrocks · 11-10-2005, 03:50 PM

I write independantly of the music the vast majority of the time. They are more poetry than anything.

and "And All I Remember" is based on how sometimes when relationships end it is very...uh cruel. somethings get said that you want to take back and you end up never speaking again.

adidasss · 11-10-2005, 04:12 PM

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Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

This is not revenge. All I did was hand you the match. And maybe some gasoline. And maybe some soaked rags.

coolest lines ever.....

jibber · 11-10-2005, 08:43 PM

^haha, i have to agree with that. by far my favorite lines in any of the songs i've seen posted up here.

11-05-2005, 09:38 AM	#1 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	2 new songs This Is Giving In The weight that we carry on our shoulders can be lifted if we just give in. I’m so far from home, and now I know, that the choices I make, are truly my own I’ll say the final prayer but it’s already too late Death rides a pale horse, and of course, Oblivion rides in his wake What we sought is not what we originally thought Cleave your way through mere mortal’s in order to obtain the prize, your life, in exchange for a place in memory. Better to rule in hell than serve in heaven. And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes All I remember is how the flames danced in your eyes. You always claimed you were handy with a lighter. What is amazing is that the rotted wood actually caught. Now I’m on the wrong side of the continental divide. I’d hide my disgust but to bide time might be careless at this point. I desire only to see you consumed by the very fire you caused. The very flame you grew and knew would consume you. This is not revenge. All I did was hand you the match. And maybe some gasoline. And maybe some soaked rags. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

11-09-2005, 05:42 PM	#4 (permalink)
Merkaba Whitewater! Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: New Zealand Posts: 2,885	I particularly like the last line of the first song. Is the last one something that has sort of happened in your life before? Has a mate burnt a house down or anything? It sounds very autobiographical. If that makes any sense. __________________ She thinks I'm a reclusive genius, she's going to be very disappointed when she finds out i'm a reclusive wanker

11-09-2005, 10:11 PM	#6 (permalink)
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople... Posts: 1,536	^ nah think he's just a pyro. there's no deeper meaning to that song at all. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

11-10-2005, 03:50 PM	#8 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	I write independantly of the music the vast majority of the time. They are more poetry than anything. and "And All I Remember" is based on how sometimes when relationships end it is very...uh cruel. somethings get said that you want to take back and you end up never speaking again. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

11-10-2005, 08:43 PM	#10 (permalink)
jibber Freeskier Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople... Posts: 1,536	^haha, i have to agree with that. by far my favorite lines in any of the songs i've seen posted up here. __________________ What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

11-10-2005, 04:03 AM	#7 (permalink)
DontRunMeOver They call me Tundra Boy Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: In your linen cupboard. Posts: 1,166	Nice lyrics Rise Against Rocks. I prefered "And All I Remember Is How the Flames Danced In Your Eyes" as it had a strong theme. Were you writing these lyrics as a starting point for the song, or fitting them into an already existing song? To me the phrasing looked more like poetry than lyrics - as you'd typically see a lot of short phrases with obvious repeating rhythms in lyrics rather than a few long ones with no obvious rhythmic pattern or hooklines.